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CRUISE LINER

This cohort of Poseidon crosses the wastes

storming horizons on spume and spray

cruising, schmoozing

herding its cargo like a cowboy of the plains

whipping up wind on waves

of self - indulgence

in the wild west and east of effulgence,

the cargo refreshed by all that's unnatural

while the clouds and the seas

seem fit to please.

 

This monstrous celebrant, multi-tiered

in layered containment slowly digests the miles, and

when channels welcome her

in she flows, the more than OK corral

then the word goes round, a stranger's in town.

 

     Beggars and opportunists stand their ground.

 

     For the streets must fill

     mementoes sought out

     knee jerk photos taken

     and, as if to prove the sun must shine

     the pageant unrolls yet another dawn

     for the ship of the line.

◄ A DREAM WITHIN A DREAM

STAINED GLASS ►

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raypool

Fri 26th Feb 2016 21:18

Thanks Harry. I had this idea of cowboys and fell back on that idea in those lines. I 'm pleased you think it worked, as it takes nerve to shatter an image.

Ray.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 26th Feb 2016 15:04

Ray,
I like the way Lines fourteen, fifteen and sixteen so unexpectedly (yet so rightly) `ground` the process.

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Stu Buck

Thu 25th Feb 2016 23:42

thanks! the very little one (zephaniah) is 14 days old. his big sister (elizah) is very helpful. the cats dont like him much but we do.

as for the poem, its great as are the rest of what i have called 'rays travel and tourism sequence'.

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raypool

Thu 25th Feb 2016 23:37

Have I hit a sweet spot, Stu? I don't know where the hell I'm going half the time: my creative side is like a jerky gearbox, sometimes in sometimes out of gear, but never smoothly engaged. Your comment has cheered me up as I sweated over the poem . Nice to see the little 'uns on facebook, by the way!!

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Stu Buck

Thu 25th Feb 2016 22:28

enjoying this mini-series ray. this is alliterative heaven, and you paint travel and tourism as both a well oiled, depressing machine and an almost menacing juggernaut.

very enjoyable.

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