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CREATURE COMFORTS

Eyes bright with fierce intelligence gleam,

Reflected in the headlight's beam,

Their owner stops dead in its tracks

Wary of the passing beast's attacks.

 

The danger past the search resumes

For food its waiting brood consumes

Seeking everywhere it can

Edible detritus left by man.

 

Pausing, perhaps it remembers still

The feel of the country breeze's chill

But time and need has seen its feet

Adapting to the city street.

 

Survival has been its ceaseless aim

Hunted, hated, the one to blame.

Does it envy the fox its street-wise grace...

This brown rat hiding from place to place?

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raypool

Sun 3rd Apr 2016 19:38

Interesting how life is recycled in all sorts of ways, and a nice twist that it is a rat that comes out of hiding for the scraps ! It is always horrible to run over animals and this poem has a nice simple feel to it for me.

Ray

Jemima Jones

Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:31

Hi again M.C.
Yes,I can understand your valid point.Thank you.Jemima.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:22

Thanks for the comments, ladies.
JJ - the problem with polishing is that it tends to remove
the patina. :-)

Jemima Jones

Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:15

M.C.I also like this poem,however,I respectfully think it is worthy of a teensy weensy 'polishing'
Thank you.Jemima.

alseau nonas

Sat 2nd Apr 2016 16:41

I enjoyed reading this quite a lot. Very good piece. "The danger past the search resumes" is a great line on many levels.

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