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artificial

This new relationship is not working
cant help but compare you to the last one
which curiously failed
tracks are never straight
expect to be derailed
now and again
I keep thinking you’ll put red lipstick on
but its brown
I keep thinking you’ll recognise
the tell tale sign when I’m down
but you look right through me
I wonder if you do the same
compare, me to him
perhaps he never was down
had to limp the lame mile
the way I would for her
I wonder if that’s a false smile
upon my humours genuine grin
the first month
straight from the ice box
the place I kept my feelings for a while
but this trial honeymoon ended in climate change
and the pool beneath our feet is a mile across
deranged and
perfectly poised to consume us
we will never work
help me
I’m melting.
-watch us world as we melt
spectator sport of sorts
watch us world as they say ‘told you so’
watch us world as we wither
watch the couple that can never be
watch the stumbling dither
closer now
its coming
those dreadful silences
the mis-match of taste
familiarity!, this  monster emotion arrived
punctual and against my wishes
we are who we are, such joys of searching soul mates
nothing can predict what chord licked the compatible
opposites that don’t attract
we are as attractive as floral wallpaper
paste messages
writing on the wall one sided and listing
weighted
closer now, it’s coming
a text message loose cannon easy texts
calm before the storm of when you know its over
no control
ambient temperature has presented a hole
in the tundra
we have melted
I could fish there now, but no point
I don’t wish to know what’s inside
I want to be the man
not a paint pot
you seen my lid screwed on tight? we ain’t right
tense, simmering things I wish to say
not my style to explode that way
what I thought was an  inch is really a mile
filed down to makes us closer
its artificial
and
we will never work.

◄ a movie within a movie

that tear ►

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winston plowes

Mon 20th Jul 2009 23:27

tracks are never straight
expect to be derailed

Yes, I ended up in the tram tracks recently and ended up at the depot for a service. We struggle on. Liked especially -

and the pool beneath our feet is a mile across

great end too. Take care Win x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 19th Jul 2009 21:05

Really good, Pete. I like the stream of consciousness style - it digs deep.

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Isobel

Sun 19th Jul 2009 20:18

Hmmm - relationships are not easy things to make work - particularly as you get older and have bad experience - it makes you scared of repeating mistakes. Perhaps we should just enjoy whatever honeymoon periods we can and try not to get too hung up about the failures - life is just too short. Back to the poem - the end of a relationship - beautifully expressed, as ever.

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Francine

Sat 18th Jul 2009 16:13

Love, love, love this!
Especially these last lines:
'you seen my lid screwed on tight? we ain’t right
tense, simmering things I wish to say
not my style to explode that way
what I thought was an inch is really a mile
filed down to makes us closer
its artificial
and
we will never work.'

Magnifique : )

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