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rain again tonight.
light scatters
on the  pavement
like glass

i remember
the broad
curve of the river
keeping time
with the windows
of the train

i watched you
watch the water pass,
one palm curled
around the shadow
of your wrist

i was waiting then, too

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Stu Buck

Sun 29th May 2016 11:11

this is so satisfying to read. perfect words, perfect length.

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Martin Elder

Sat 28th May 2016 21:03

this definitely has a nice flow and feel to it. Nice one

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raypool

Wed 25th May 2016 22:20

Nice rhythmic feel and enough left to the imagination to be satisfying.

A real goodie !

Ray

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