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TRAPPED IN TIME

There were the days, so many

when you took the brunt

of someone else's gouging tongue

the lash that gave no thought of sting,

or worse, measured it in the ring.

Resentments, insults showered out

the slipshod scoring of endless points

that demeaned your efforts,

wracked your joints,

jealous taunts that reached far back,

so far back that it seems

that history was moulded in a wound.

 

Yet, back you crept with an inner force

that rose inside you

anger perhaps, maintained, explained

and cast you for the finer things.

 

Some of us treated thus

would have spread the taint

like waves to take the likes of us

far out to sea, swept in again

on waves, on waves of misery

 

but what rained down

with the sparks of temper,

you cast aside and the thorny crown

caring not to take the blame

of being trapped, trapped in time

for someone else's wave of crime

and now, and now

can show the world you have a place

with no inherited sad disgrace.

 

🌷(4)

early negative influences

◄ CAMBRIAN RAILWAY

MADE TO MEASURE, MADE FOR PLEASURE ►

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raypool

Sat 2nd Jul 2016 22:18

Thank you Colin, appreciate it. I think the repeated words do help to reinforce the message sometimes.

Glad you liked this, elPintor. Someone must stand up for the disinherited, and we can all do that if we look with compassion.

Ray

elPintor

Sat 2nd Jul 2016 15:07

I like this very much, Ray. Even those who haven't overcome circumstances such as these know or know of someone who has--if they've only half a mind to see them.

There's a great amount to be said about going on with living with your humanity and sense of right in tact in spite of the efforts of others to bring you down to their level.

The last verse is like a silent triumph over victimization that works very well.

elP

<Deleted User> (13762)

Sat 2nd Jul 2016 08:09

I think the repetition of some of the words works well in this piece Ray.

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