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THE GIRL WHO DID JIGSAW PUZZLES

At Clanricarde Gardens on a stuffy summer's night

I dropped a waitress at her flat

on a considered whim though undermotivated,

and she asked me in.

 

Through the marooned shell of a hall

and up the stair, no carpet

to soften the tread or tame

the lighted glare.

 

It was never designed to be a conquest,

she was dumpy and plain

and all the music wrung out of me

it was nearing the hour of three.

 

The Bayswater Road minded its business

she brewed a coffee

I perched, she plumped.

 

Then she drew my tired eye

to the magnolia walls

to the jigsaw puzzles carefully mounted

in matching frames, spreading out

 

to personalize the nondescript room,

thousand piecers, a minor lifetime

spent in modest absorbing gloom

and suddenly I fancied her for her brain engaged

 

bent forward over the utility table

pressing mole - like to the task

all thoughts of waitressing abandoned there

and how gratified she might feel

 

to have an admirer seeing her

being constantly undersold

to really shine or simply think

to put her hand in mine.

 

🌷(1)

loneliness

◄ MADE TO MEASURE, MADE FOR PLEASURE

HAIKU ►

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raypool

Tue 5th Jul 2016 21:49

I'm coming straight back on this Phil. So glad you got the truth of the feel of this one. This was not fantasy but sad reality - something that can move us and perhaps add a little moment of quality. I tend to write of actual events. The west end hotels I worked in during the eighties were masters of their own destiny and flagships for squandering of money for jollies including us musicians who got mortgages with the results, thank God. This lady was a victim of the system - a job of sorts. Clanricarde Gardens was stacked with tiny apartments for catering staff. There was a disastrous fire there apparently probably due to lack of electrical maintenance.

Cheers, I feel humbled that you liked this.

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Various

Tue 5th Jul 2016 21:23

Hi Ray. I read this and thought he's off on some mid life crisis malarky here after your delicious last.

Then I looked deeper and felt ashamed for not seeing the beauty of what you are saying... looking deeper and finding the beauty that others overlook.
And the ability to look for that.
Thank you.

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