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O RIVER THAMES

O River Thames,  maiden born pure

then, like the life around you polluted

now once more sparkling without your trade

chastened by those who would buy

your favours in high rise form

pressed close guarded, jealous of others

who would press their claims

on your genuflection and breathe

your grey reflection.

 

You shamelessly ignore those men

with Rolex watches who,

waking through glass

pivot on east and west water

make their insignificant histories count

on the only waterway they cannot mount.

◄ INNOCENT CASUALTIES OF RELIGIOUS WAR

VENTURING IN ►

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raypool

Sat 20th Aug 2016 21:16

Thanks so much for appreciating this one Stu. I started with a different version and whittled it down, which is what I often do now. (Like the teacher said, "can do better"!)
I had the idea of personalizing the water, an old trick to focus the emotions.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Fri 19th Aug 2016 20:51

who would press their claims

on your genuflection and breathe

your grey reflection.

what excellent lines. this is great ray, i love waking through glass and the last lines are great as well. i love the sense of a river seeing everything, knowing everything. lovely.

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