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Silent & Cold

This poem came about when I was just playing around trying to use just three words to a line.  I'd appreciate any feedback you guys have on it!  Let me know what you think:

 

 

Silent and cold

Chills the bones

Freezes the blood

Unsettles the soul

 

Harries the mind

Wailing and shrieking

Harridan voices calling

Keening, crying, weeping

Sanity’s requiem keeping

 

The dead dance

The Damned waltz

And God plays

The maddening flute

Over and over

Until the last

When we advance

To the grave

 

No longer dancing

No longer wailing

Silent and cold

 

◄ On Being Alone

I Stand Exposed ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (6484)

Mon 17th Aug 2009 16:04

Interesting piece Steven and credit to you for trying something differant, might give that a go myself.
one minor, minor crit, first line, silent and cold or silence and cold???
Bernie

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