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Old Woman in a Corner


 

Old Woman in a Corner

 

Heavy boots hammered down

The empty hallway.

Fists  thundered on the wooden door,

And it fell back easily

Well-oiled.

 

In the sparse room

Three people sat at a plank table

Their veins rigid, blank eyes fixed

On the opening door.

 

In a corner of the cell

Crouched an old woman

Her warped spine braced against the wall.

She was crooning to a young child

Cradled in her lap.

Tiny fingers stroked her withered cheeks

Her quivering lip

As the smiling baby reached for the lullaby

Gently cooing back.

 

All this

In a blood-beat

Through the heart

Through the heart ... through the heart ... through ...

Then

What had to be done

Was done.

 

Cynthia Buell Thomas

 

 

 

 

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Val Cook

Sat 22nd Aug 2009 10:19

A good use of pace throughout. I thought the ending was well done, leaving us to imagine the ending..

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Isobel

Wed 19th Aug 2009 08:25

Have read this one a few times and kept meaning to comment - just had to work out what I wanted to say. This has the feeling of a narrative rather than a poem. So much atmosphere, tension, build up.... There has to be a chapter 2 but when an innocent child is involved - do we really want to hear it? The child engages us emotionally though and you manage to get us all wondering. Excellent work.

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 19th Aug 2009 02:57

Hi Cynthia,
Your recent entries just go to show that nostalgis is still what it used to be! ;-) Much enjoying your reveries.

Regards,
A.E.

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Cate Greenlees

Tue 18th Aug 2009 19:21

Some lovely lines here, I love the line "As the smiling baby reached for the lullaby", which makes the implied violence that followed all the more horrific.
Cate xx

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winston plowes

Tue 18th Aug 2009 17:55

Hi Cynthia. I agree with Janet. A gruesome ending and for me there was only one thing that could possibly, which is....

Win x

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Tue 18th Aug 2009 14:09

I really enjoyed the last stanza too. Though enjoyed feels like the wrong word here.
This has an element of leaving what happened next to the reader which leaves me kind of stunned because of the imagery within the poem. Not sure if it's meant to be a sinister end but that's the feeling i got.

Janet.x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 18th Aug 2009 09:59

small room...small table...small group... no mysticism implied, although who knows how the mind operates sometimes under subliminal influences.

steve mellor

Tue 18th Aug 2009 09:13

Hi Cynthia
Odd question, but why 3 people?

Steve M. (friend)

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