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I KILLED THE MONSTER

"I killed the monster!"

the hero said

but sad to say it wasn't real

it was just inside his head.

 

Then he smiled insanely

while the people clapped and sang

not knowing why death

should be so joyous

or why the rafters rang.

 

But any death is better than none

though it's just inside our heads

and better to claim a victory

than die upon our beds.

🌷(3)

◄ SPRING - HEELED JACK

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Becky Sowray

Sat 29th Oct 2016 15:20

hello Ray

lots of double headed images in this; like the role your rhyming plays; backstage but central. ?

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Stu Buck

Fri 14th Oct 2016 22:17

i can image cohen doing a great service to this

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raypool

Fri 14th Oct 2016 22:14

Thanks Tony - I like to keep up ! You're a hard act to follow as I see it.
Suki, I can't really do lyrics although I am a musician, but who knows - it does have a certain rhyming roll !

David, what you say is bang on and I did have some of these thoughts in mind . Thanks for your comments.

Ray

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suki spangles

Thu 13th Oct 2016 20:14

This isn't only a great poem, but would also be a great lyric/song! Nice one Ray.

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