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when a dog returns to consume its own vomit, it does so through choice and not hunger

at its best it is a glass over a candle,

blinkered, immediate. we are not past

or future, just anchored now, gripped

just tight enough to finger-paint lust

on bony shoulders, just a couple more

scratches to blame on the cat, our

wrists reddened by weekend revelry.

how stale it felt on a rainy wednesday

but still you had read online that it

helped, that it might make you feel

how you felt at first, that my face might

devolve, change back into the playful

prince that you had first spread your

legs for and i wish now that someone

had told me how wonderful it all was,

even when it felt like love was a bulb

i held in both hands, light escaping

from the cracks between my fingers.

🌷(4)

◄ all we ever wanted was everything

seasonal attraction disorder ►

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Stu Buck

Tue 18th Oct 2016 12:05

cheers everyone, much appreciated.

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Martin Elder

Tue 18th Oct 2016 11:17

another marvellous piece Stu from the title through to the end. You have a great way of exploring subject matters. I love the description of love escaping through the cracks in fingers.

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Tom Harding

Tue 18th Oct 2016 00:30

vivid stuff, i like it stu

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John Marks

Mon 17th Oct 2016 23:45

We appear to be anchored, in fact there is nothing to anchor ourselves to, so we move on.

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Oct 2016 12:28

thanks tony, im glad you enjoyed it and took out of it what was meant to be there.

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Stu Buck

Sun 16th Oct 2016 22:36

cheers both. you are both there really, the decay of lust, the sad passing of a relationship, the boredom, the regret, the starvation of love (kudos on getting the candle thing). to be specific, its about the need to spice up a relationship sexually in order to lie to each other (and yourself) about your feelings.

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raypool

Sun 16th Oct 2016 22:21

I like the glass over the candle, Stu - a starvation of oxygen or expectancy, a stifling feeling. I think this may colour the whole poem . It is sad in the way it reveals a decay of lust.

Nice one. Ray

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