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Claire`s hair

 

It`s a fall! A drop!

Sheer from the top

Joy to the sight it is.

A drape! A cape!

Sleek on her neck`s nape,

A helmet of light it is.

 

It`s a spilled sluice

Of gold juice

At the vintage-squeeze it is.

(The slight stir

Of one hair

Caught in the breeze it is.)

 

It`s the deep gleam

Of that oak beam

At the head of the stairs it is.

The silk glow

Of the chestnut`s show

In the fall – and it`s Clare`s it is!

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Travis Brow

Fri 2nd Dec 2016 07:10

This is lovely Harry; it positively fizzes. You've deployed some excellent metaphors.

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 30th Nov 2016 21:17

Thanks everyone for your comments!

circumstances are compelling me to restrict my own comments at the moment...But I`m grateful.

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raypool

Wed 30th Nov 2016 19:28

Nicely constructed Harry , like a "whole" in one. A joy to read and the flow of it is right for the sensation of brushing hair, I reckon.

Ray

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Tue 29th Nov 2016 22:34

good'un H! reminds me of Betjamins 'Myfanwy' somewhat



Rose ?

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 29th Nov 2016 20:32

Not sure if this is a repost.

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