Donations are essential to keep Write Out Loud going    

Nearly Love

 

(a parting sonnet for Jean)

 

Let`s not call this cosy comfort love,

But only say that once there was a time

When the loneliness and travel-heat of the way

Became too much for us, when it was enough

To leave the world go by us and recline,

I in your deep kindness, you in mine.

 

And though we boast: we never did betray

Cupid with words – being much too wise,

Let`s confess: our arms, our lips, our eyes

Sometimes told untruths in our despite.

But Jean, they were such little, little lies

That he just chuckled, and forgave us…quite.

 

But now, for truths sake, just before we go:

It was not love…but it was nearly so!

◄ Claire`s hair

Miracle of wondrous canal lock ►

Comments

Travis Brow

Thu 12th Jan 2017 07:01

Beautiful.

Profile image

Laura Taylor

Wed 21st Dec 2016 12:54

I love this Harry. I am embarrassingly ignorant of the rules of sonnets, for some reason I can't keep them locked in my head, but I can feel the structure alright in this.

Profile image

raypool

Tue 20th Dec 2016 16:22

Just read this Harry and I quite agree about the format allowing a sort of meandering poetic explanation for such personal affairs. I feel it like a very expensive mattress that you lie back and float through the poem!

A really good sentiment and honest too.

Ray. Happy Xmas

Profile image

Harry O'Neill

Tue 20th Dec 2016 15:22

In giving this another airing I was struck by the way the sonnet form allows the nuancing of emotions with a kind of forethought, afterthought, and then a sort of summing up.

(It could be an argument, counter argument and decision...
all kinds of differing things)

It also lets you play around with the rhyme between the differing.

No wonder Shakespeare fancied it so much.

If you wish to post a comment you must login.

This site uses cookies. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.

Find out more Hide this message