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TERMINAL FACILITATION part 2

Danvers paused, looked up at the sign

Induction Department

up the stairs

the backlit walls looking shyly back

with whispers of a call once dreaded

no doors save the one at the end

he saw

and the way the day imparted its secrets

to bring him here

like a mouse in a trap  

surrounded by death

a senseless history drawing him in

and the door silently opened.

 

Inside two men, one standing up

the other on a bed,

a drip connecting him to life

with thin anaemic liquid's glow

a screen behind his head.

Neither spoke to Danvers there

but a letter stood upon a desk

a gesture bade him read the note

and then he understood.

 

Now he knew the reason for death

his meeting there a subterfuge

the other man smiled as the truth hit home

his blood was needed for the other man

a special group so rare his tribute

to another life in scant suspension.

The sun seeped in to light the scene

a dawn and sunset tragically combined

as Danvers accepted the glass of water

and sedative to steady his nerves

hung his coat upon a hook

gave the sun a final look.

 

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raypool

Wed 30th Nov 2016 19:24

Thanks for your wise and counselling words Colin and Stu.
When one puts poems on one hopes for the eye of the astute and respected, or indeed anyone that might find a poem appealing.
Colin , I hold you part responsible for the urge to do the follow up and as you can see there is no actual demise, although I feel the threat is part of the lure of such material. He seems to be sleepwalking to no future. I don't want a third part that descends into comedy, though who knows?

Stu, well spotted, just a brush stroke to signify two powerful strands, sometimes horror can be an object imbued with thoughts, and you sir have alighted like a raven on these. Cheers. Congrats for POTW)

Maybe the third should be: Danvers makes a will!

Ray

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Stu Buck

Wed 30th Nov 2016 16:39

quite excellent, i shall go and read part one at once. loads of great lines here but for some reason i am particularly drawn to;

with thin anaemic liquid's glow

a screen behind his head.

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Tue 29th Nov 2016 22:22

This is an excellent follow up Ray - but did Danvers take the sedative? I eagerly await part 3. There is a good sense of light and dark running throughout this whole scene, very atmospheric - The sun seeped in to light the scene / a dawn and sunset tragically combined - great lines.

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