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Ice and Fire of Desire

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we are frozen

two feet apart

facing.


hyperborean statues

marble moons locked

as sharpened air penetrates

deep into our benumbed porous core.


helplessly

we gulp down 

gusts of gelid wind

that ices lung tissue 

and stabs at our drum-tight hearts

until they rupture and erupt


releasing the lava of love

that floods every fibre

of our being

instantanteously breaching

the surface strata of skin.


no longer petrified

we dissolve

into amulets of fine filigree

a fusion

now greater than the sum of our parts

another Montague and Capulet.

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Paul Waring

Tue 7th Feb 2017 17:12

Laura, you are so generous, I don't know how to thank you. I'll remember these words.

Aythangyow so much, you've made my day ?

Paul

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Laura Taylor

Tue 7th Feb 2017 15:54

It was well worth the time Paul. Editing is never a waste of time.

I meant to say too that your imagery is startling, and your use of rhyme is both subtle and, in that way, satisfying.

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Paul Waring

Tue 7th Feb 2017 13:56

Laura, thank you. I am so touched, in fact thrilled, by your comments. I worked and revised this for such a long time that I began to doubt I'd ever capture the essence of what I wanted to express. So I posted it and hoped for the best. Your inspiring comments have made the effort of writing and revising it more worthwhile than you could imagine! Big thanks ?

Paul

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Laura Taylor

Tue 7th Feb 2017 13:20

Cor! Incredibly dense, and tangible in places too. This is an incredible piece Paul, nicely done.

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