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"Village Scene, Lincolnshire"

Glimpsed from the bus, a

Pregnant hump of displaced earth

Piled to fill a grave.

Some flowers too - not many.

No hearse.  No crowd of mourners.

 

A wreath shows Dad's passed.

Just “Dad.” Enough. Her father.

He had squeezed her hand

And breathed his last breath sighing

For loves past – and those to come.

 

The girl stood alone

Kicking at the grave earth pile

Wringing tear chapped hands

He was all she ever had

He was not much - just a dad.

 

A poignant vision

Too profound to fade away 

Into memory

As the bus set off again,

It crossed my mind to wonder
 

Would tomorrow bring

Another graveside mourner?

As the graveyard thrives

The village slowly dies - then

Who will dig for the digger?

 

The bus returning

Twilight cools the lonely grave,

No sign of daughter.

A brooding separation

Hovers, heavy, lowering.

 

His best girl's home now

Making tea and being brave.

His remains remain

Slowly turning back to dust

In the sanctum of his grave.

 

 

🌷(3)

◄ “Meeting Mrs. Potiphar”

"Et camera non mentior." ►

Comments

Frances Macaulay Forde

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 02:21

From a small glimpse to the huge moment of death, effortlessly negotiated on a bus.
A devoted route, no chance of getting off, the inevitable loss of village and dad cannot be denied.
I still miss my dad after 34 years.
A deceptively clever poem. Thank you.

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suki spangles

Fri 17th Feb 2017 09:57

Ray!

The prodigal son returns!

Wow, you have been through a lot recently, but glad to have you back with us.

Suki

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 14th Feb 2017 15:23

The allegory of the village dying as well as the "dad" is wonderfully poignant.

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New Shoes

Mon 13th Feb 2017 18:51

my mind went to the feeling of truly being left alone with the last one that loved and cared about you dead.

thanks

Old Shoes

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Stu Buck

Mon 13th Feb 2017 17:43

extremely moving rick. a meditation on life, death and what comes afterwards, both for the lost and the lingering.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 13th Feb 2017 13:03

Poignant and lingering "snapshot" of a moment of generational grief...a reminder of the transience of life and
the importance of realising its value every day we're here.

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Rick Gammon

Mon 13th Feb 2017 12:57

I posted this just to remind you I'm still alive so to speak..but only just ?
I've had something of a year thus far; debilitating flu (with add on wracking cough) and a black eye from a brief encounter with a hurricane lamp (I was knocked out flat on passage floor) meant my world tour of Margate went down the tubes (temporarily).
The book is with the printer - thankfully he's taken his time as a pdf file sent to me was riven with typos and grammar glitches - corrected now - hard proof copy coming on Tuesday. Oh and some lines more clunky than my granddad's Ford Prefect of 1954.
Rather than spoil the ship etc, I've got a professional proof reader lined up to do the biz - I cannot give les tricoteuses a free run with silly errors.
And nothing new from me - I dunno if I'm blocked or log jammed with ideas...time will tell ?
So it's hey ho. On with the motley ?

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