Long distance
It’s 30 miles from mine to yours
But every night it feels like more
When I get in and clear my head
I want you but get me instead.
The smell of weariness and gloom
Has killed your hairspray and perfume
Though misplaced socks and sleeping mask
Make through the week a simpler task
In this, my fucking freezing flat
(No you to sort the thermostat)
It feels like Elton John was right
This really is a timeless flight
Like watching Earth from on the moon
Hoping to return home soon.
What is home? I still don’t know
Perhaps our hearts and minds do, though.
Your real life home requires a car
My lasso doesn’t reach that far
But if it could I’d throw it long
To bring you back where you belong
We’d make our bed and lie in it,
Not getting out till we saw fit.
To confirm true love’s persistence
In the face of life’s long distance.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 1st Mar 2017 14:33
I'm with Travis on this one. Read it over and over and out loud and check the syllable count in each line and see if you can't improve the flow. I think it'd be worth it. Cheers, Col