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MARRIAGE VOWS

I the undersigned accept

my authority being undermined,

all decisions I shall forfeit

my personality will be deemed to fit.

 

If I take steps to avoid this fate

I will engender a tete a tete

and thus upset this holy estate

so I simply accept the inevitable

 

and end up a simple vegetable.

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◄ IRON MAIDEN

IN AT THE DEEP END ►

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raypool

Fri 31st Mar 2017 13:41

Thanks Harry for your views - you have given me fresh hope even in stagnation; i'm not quite up to salvation.
In the words of the comic: "it seems like only yesterday we got married; I wish it was tomorrow, i'd cancel it."

Ray

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 31st Mar 2017 00:03

Ray,
There are worse things than being a solid, well set in the soil cabbage.

(a fly-blown, moth-eaten, blown about, limp lettuce-leaf for
instance...Face up to it man...marry the woman! ?)

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raypool

Wed 29th Mar 2017 19:08

Thanks Suki for your interesting and provocative idea. I think there could be a "intellectual" series of poetic cards poking fun . Any entrepeneurs out there? 10% for the idea please.

Ray

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suki spangles

Wed 29th Mar 2017 11:11

Hi Ray,

I'd love to see Hallmark use this poem in a Valentine or anniversary card, but I'm not sure such witty ironic humour is their thing. That's their loss. Pithy stuff!

Suki

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raypool

Tue 28th Mar 2017 22:49

Thanks for your comments elP and Paul. Cynthia, it's very gratifying that you twigged the humorous aspect - I can't be taken literally!

Thanks for liking those lines David. Actually it's more of an own up than a pre nup these days!.

Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 28th Mar 2017 12:42

On the other hand, I don't feel so much 'pain' as rogue-ish hilarity. I think laughter is a huge benefit to any relationship. Fab subject. Good rhyming!

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Paul Waring

Tue 28th Mar 2017 09:26

Cor Ray, maybe there is a fate worse than death after all ? I can hear and feel the pain here....?

Paul

elPintor

Tue 28th Mar 2017 00:08

whoooah..I shudder at the thought...

elP

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