Girl in a Lake
over somnolent eyes the full moon cast luminous shadows
of shifting cloud swan path shafting seductive to the shore
where she dropped her clothes by the stony shallows and
entered liquid light on jewelled feet icy lustrous pale arms
uplifted wide eyes of unwavering clarity gleaming she sank
to her knees in the bitter midnight water open palms thrust
upward reaching offering asking sweet scented vines tumbled
heavy over white breasts mellow blossoms shining in moonlight
dark eyes fixed the blinding moon a black mass mounted the
shuddering lake invisible leaves slipped into gobbling waves
like drooling tongues licking snatching at her lovely nakedness
shoving silken thighs against hunched rocks aghast she reared
from their suckling mouths and stumbled to the shore where
trembling uncontrollably she folded her clothes over her mind
<Deleted User> (17552)
Fri 2nd Jun 2017 14:59
The last line gets to me, how exactly do you mean it? I really like the style of this poem, it's captivating in a sense of wonder and odd uniformity (but also different).
Love the assonance (is that what it's called?), and I really think highly of the consistency in your writing.
What was the purpose of the poem though? If I had to guess it was to demonstrate the beauty of emotional nackedness and the shame of it? Maybe that's just the meaning I drew.