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TIME FLIES, NOTHING CHANGES

Bob Payne opened his door again

six years now elapsed,

looked older, nudging eighty

I guessed

oak and mahogany maintained

rugs respecting remembered silence

punctuated by a shouldering grandfather clock

spinning interior hours, days

weeks, years.

 

I had left his house before with

all surfaces polished.

Now I saw the rings that cups had left

a puppy's teethmarks at ankle height

 

that parrot still in its cage suspended

foraging the small space.

"They live to sixty" he said,

what would become of it I wondered

 

nothing had changed.

We exchanged pleasantries

he had suggested medication

for my nocturnal excessive urination before

an old concern lived through and survived.

His wife was still a churchwarden

(i'd remembered, he was impressed).

 

A hernia operation had left him with MRSA

he'd lost weight.

 

Light still gently entered in,

a garden cut a large swathe,

same bird feeders, strangely empty today.

 

"Turn right at Dovers Mead," he had said

I fretted over the A to Z

now it all came strangely back.

 

My mind turned its pages of time passed

grandchildren at university

house extensions built

relationships broken down,

overgrown banks of dementia

worries rising like islands

in boiling seas, lava settled.

 

Brambles threatened the hidden drive

nature had come back.

I left him to his paperwork

that    never seems to stop.

 

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◄ AT THE WATERING HOLE

BORN AGAIN ►

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raypool

Sat 29th Apr 2017 20:04

Thanks David Suki and Paul for your thoughts.

The reason I wrote this is how weird it felt to go back and retrace my steps after six years and to remember so much of that earlier time in detail , etched as it were. The same thing can happen I suppose in unchanged environments and can woo us in different ways with a sense of time passing.

David, sadness is something I instinctively pick up on - really it is a way of life with me. I want to heal it, but I am also a sharer of it. The setting was certainly quintessentially English and cossetted, but the parrot just seemed incongruous.

Nice compliment Suki. Sometimes I just indulge myself in detail as if constructing a stage set. It's easy to overdo it! I hope my humour is never vicious, but it is broad.

Cheers Paul. Always good to get your thoughts, which here seem to coincide with the other comments.

Jemima, how kind - you have fallen into my humour pot, but with equal respect I did try his idea of pills, but I didn't persevere long enough for it to go away. I'm anti pill really and in any case after six years I feel fairly confident. Thanks for the advice though. I havn't checked out the tenna pads ; probably more embarrassing than a teenage request for condoms. Can you be serious about the shape? Thanks.
I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!



Ray

Jemima Jones

Sat 29th Apr 2017 20:01

tear jerkingly beautiful Ray.Might one dare ask(with the greatest of respect)re your urinary probs,isn't there a version of Tenna pads for gentlemen.Sock shaped perhaps?
Thank you.Jemima.

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Paul Waring

Sat 29th Apr 2017 16:27

Touching and sad aspects of life and inevitable change captured in fine detail here Ray through observation and reflection. Fine writing. And the audio brought it all to life so well.

Paul

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suki spangles

Sat 29th Apr 2017 04:33

Hi Ray,

Your reading is right on the money again. I have listened twice to this; your reading really evokes and brings out the mood of the piece.

It's the combination of light and dark, witty observation and warmth, and then the last two verses take it to a darker place. I like the way you constructed this, although it appears quite effortless..

Thanks for sharing,
Suki

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