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our life is not a love song though maybe it is

as if the highway were a simple white vector

a vibrating ribbon, flapping and flowing in the breeze.

where do the wild lights go to debate the stars?

 

a scream, a life, a copper-dusk-ditch becomes a dive-bar-life-boat

to those who can’t abide, and i might be able to quote perfect

‘the dharma bums’ as if i were a texan pastor, screaming the gospel

from hoarse lungs soothed later with scotch and sermon,

but I cannot comfort my child.

 

so who really cares if kerouac found his open road?

who cares if ginsberg found the perfect trip while

balls deep in the beat generation? he died like the rest of us,

a smoke stack, a whisper of freezing marble and a blade,

this time dull, an epitaph;

 

here lies another man

who failed at everything he tried.

 

🌷(3)

◄ take the darkness of this world and make it light

not every poem has to be about love or loss ►

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Stu Buck

Wed 10th May 2017 16:42

thanks guys. sorry i have been so slow to reply, life has found its hectic vibrations again

elPintor

Thu 4th May 2017 00:07

Nihilism...that's just what I was going to say. It's like approaching that last cruel stumbling stone that puts you on your face in the desert and sends all your beliefs into nothingness.

elP

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raypool

Wed 3rd May 2017 20:29

I think some power with the poem comes through the questioning Stu. We are asked to participate in dire options and make considerations for which you have unavoidable answers. Great stuff , you at your best I feel.


Ray

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Wed 3rd May 2017 10:13

I love those first two lines - they invite the reader in and personally I'd be tempted on heading off in a different direction but I like also where you have taken us. As David said, it's all very nihilistic but I guess also we wouldn't be here discussing and commenting without the likes of Kerouac and Ginsberg having passed before us. I like to think of them and us as graphene thin additions to this humanity experiment. Weirdly my lightbulb is flickering as I write this.

Really liked this piece Stu and I'm tempted to go listen to PiL's This is Not a Love Song.

Cheers,
Col

PS: the bulb has died.

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Paul Waring

Wed 3rd May 2017 00:56

Such fascinating and imaginative writing Stu. It's so rich that it took a few reads but the re-reading was so worthwhile. Great stuff.

Paul

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