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minds under arrest

they chart choreography of lives

learn the mechanism of moves              

then wait to bring thunder clouds

to storm and force doors 

at the dark side of dawn

with barking mouths and feet

 

it's in their dna to examine 

and remove the fibres of yours

distilling essence for clues

from nooks and crannies

 

they scour sinks for germs

from scrubbed hard drives

of minds, words and images

lurking deep behind eyes

 

then swarm upstairs to strip

search sheets for signs

of bad dreams, tip upside down

linen baskets of thoughts and

take some away for questioning

 

 

 

 

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Paul Waring

Tue 16th May 2017 21:55

Thanks Stu, very generous compliment indeed and I'm very grateful to you.

Paul

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Stu Buck

Tue 16th May 2017 14:30

very interesting paul and beautifully written as usual

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Paul Waring

Tue 16th May 2017 09:51

Thanks Col, epic listening and viewing.

Paul

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Tue 16th May 2017 09:28

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Paul Waring

Tue 16th May 2017 09:05

Thanks Col, take care out there in the underworld today ?

Paul

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Tue 16th May 2017 08:46

I'm last in the queue for this one Paul but no less impressed than everyone else and they all seem to have a handle or two on it's inner depths. Defo need me coat today it's chucking it down. Now where's that umbrella with the hidden poisoned dart?

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Paul Waring

Tue 16th May 2017 08:46

Thank you so much Rose, Ray, David and Rachel pleased it sparked your imaginations!

Paul

elPintor

Tue 16th May 2017 00:20

A great "I've got a bone to pick" attitude, Paul. And, your manner of expression says a quite a lot without writing a thesis on the matter.

Privacy is a contentious issue, especially in these days when personal information can turn so much profit and is so easily begotten and subverted. If they ever find a way to tune into your thoughts, be sure that they will find a way to make your mind "legally" public property.

Rachel

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raypool

Mon 15th May 2017 17:12

Hi Paul, now you have fine tuned the thoughts behind this I can see absolute resolution as you intended ! Nice one ; in this light it strays onto science fiction territory perhaps. I'm still scared.

Cheers mate.

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Mon 15th May 2017 17:09

beaut Paul! my mind became suddenly 'arrested' by the suggestings of....

walking upside down on the ceiling,looking for *dark webs* or looking in biscuit tins for unwanted *cookies*?

I'll also stand by to get my coat too!

Really looking forward to back tracking to your previous gems Paul,but at the moment,I'm having to spread myself a lot on the thin side somewhat.


Rose.?

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Paul Waring

Mon 15th May 2017 16:34

Thanks Keith for your kind comments. I hope this stands up to re-reading and big thanks for taking time to read it first time.

And Aythangyow too Mr Ray. I nearly called this Thought Police, hence that final line. I had the idea about a world where everything you do and say might be under surveillance and then imagined an even scarier scenario where everything we think might be a target for police investigation, the entering and searching of our minds! I know, I must be like those kids in the old Vauxhall advert, "over-tired" ?

Thanks, Paul

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raypool

Mon 15th May 2017 15:13

HIghly intrusive and invasive material Paul. Choreography of lives is clever, and mechanism of moves, I never criticize your work, but I was intrigued by the end that it seemed to hang on a possibility of something more specific. "Questioning" seems so generalized . I'll get my coat!

Love it in any case. Aythangyow.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Mon 15th May 2017 13:11

Hello Paul, This poem has a fascinating quality of intrigue. I think it will be interpreted by many readers to suit their own circumstances and impression of what you have written. For me it resonates of 1984 and perhaps more. A clever piece of work which I am going to re read. Thank you for this. Keith

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