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Gone

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Gone

 

Went away one day

Hid

On the moors

Where every swell and dip

Looks like every other

 

Counted to ten

Over and over

And over again

 

They looked in ditches

In the bleak mist

Of northern hills

 

Black shadowed coppers

Bobbies with grim features

That would stay with them

A lifetime

 

My mother cried

Never stopped looking

Died

Buried with my

Wire rimmed glasses

 

I am still in nature

Where hidden

Out of sight

 

While the bad man

Who put me here

Now burns in hell

 

He will be remembered

As a monster

But I will

Never be forgotten

 

Cold now

But one day

You’ll get warmer

And find me

If you keep looking

 

Until then I’ll count to ten

Over and over

And over and over

And over and over

Again…

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raypool

Thu 18th May 2017 21:28

A fine poem to a horrendous crime Ian, and it reminds me of the long arm of the law and how a justice prevails in time. In a sense the loneliness of moorland adds a chill to the poem and the silent prayer from the unseen heart of the victim. We will always live in hope I think.

Ray

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Louise Hogg

Wed 17th May 2017 19:57

I really like this. It gave me goose bumps. Thanks for sharing.

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Wed 17th May 2017 19:54

approaching this subject from a different angle gives it just the right balance of emotion it deserves. There is also something strangely comforting in the line 'I am still in nature' as if Mother Earth is looking after this poor boy's remains until 'one day / You’ll get warmer / And find me / If you keep looking'. The counting to ten is also very clever.

I'm often a bit iffy about this type of news related poetry but I think you have done exceedingly well here. My only slight quibble is the line 'Now burns in hell' which I find a little unrealistic maybe. Sorry, struggling to find the right word to explain what I mean.

Thanks for posting Ian.
Colin

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