Out of the Darkness (revised edition)
I love to practice with the Haiku form. This is my first attempt at using a series to produce one poem. Not positive that it works as one, so advice and comments welcome but please go gently into my good night.
Thanks to everyone. I've edited and adjusted some of the lines.
Chiffon trails, blue sky.
Gun-metal smoke stains the rain,
chemical war-fare.
A whale's haunting cry
beneath oil-rigs' blackened sky
shoals of dolphins die.
Women of Ireland
dance around the sunlit hills,
bhodran beating loud.
I am a porpoise
gliding through emerald seas',
synchronicity.
Nichola Burrows
Tue 13th Oct 2009 11:43
Janet, imagery is fantastic in this. Don't know what more to say (just catching up on reading all the poems, and everyone has said it for me - this really stands out), beautiful rhythm, well executed. Love it.
Nicky x