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Blue Silk

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Some days I sit and smell the breeze
To forget about the inside and enjoy what isn't me.
My mirror becomes the meadow surrounded by trees
And the knobs on my knees are the roots underneath.

On the days I feel weak, I go to this place
Where the dew of my eyes becomes the rain.
Until it fills in puddles with the sun embraced;
Caught in its reflection, never to come out again.

I wish to be more like the sun; to know it is trapped
And not try to run is the strongest concept I know. 
It flourishes proudly wrapped in blue silk,
Confident that the rain will dry up tomorrow.

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Michaela Sheldon

Mon 26th Jun 2017 19:42

Thanks for the comments Phillip!

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Phillip Kelly

Mon 26th Jun 2017 19:15

Some very powerful imagery and metaphors in this poem comparing your features appease to the natural outdoor landscape

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Michaela Sheldon

Fri 23rd Jun 2017 12:17

Thank you all! And I agree Wolfgar, I have some revision I would like to do for this piece. I will be interested in reading about Fuchsia!

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Fri 23rd Jun 2017 08:21

I have to agree with everything that's been said - especially about Fuchsia and Gormenghast - my favourite books ever ever ever ?

Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 23rd Jun 2017 04:00

"Some days I sit and smell the breeze
To forget about the inside and enjoy what isn't me."

A beautiful introduction...

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raypool

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 22:59

Very sad in the sense of being trapped and seeking solace. Please check if you can a fictional character called Fuchsia from the Gormenghast Trilogy. She exactly reflects your thoughts here as she is in a high tower room and has a wonderful attic full of make believe attractions. The books are by Mervyn Peake. Lots of other incredible characters in them as well!

Ray x

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