dreams slip--
a river through
my fingers running
the distance--
while tiger tiger hides
behind the barricade
that keeps them safe
from reaching the sea
threatening to awaken
me to another approaching
sleepless season
even as he swears that
together at my feet, he
and night's visions will
always remain free.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 21st Jul 2017 07:51
I found myself staring at the opening two words and repeating them over and over - very effective and so too the accompanying '--' which forces the reader to pause. As always your poems allow room for movement on behalf of the reader. All the best, Col.
If you wish to post a comment you must login.
This site uses cookies. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.
elPintor
Sat 22nd Jul 2017 01:37
Hey there, Colin and David..
I am still wrangling with this one, just a bit. It really doesn't move along in the manner I would like, but I am becoming resigned to the fact that, though it may lack poetic value beyond the first few lines, it is still a valid entry in the personal blog.
You know, Colin, punctuation is a sticky point for me. I try not wrangle with it for too long, knowing that what may seem obvious to me, is truly lost on most readers. But then, there are instances when punctuation can truly make a line or verse stand as an instance within itself. Thanks for paying attention.
David, I've never read, but only listened to Thomas in a spare amount on youtube. Being here among "poets", I am somewhat ashamed of that, yet I know that I am more well read on many other ideas. But, even being mostly ignorant, I still subscribe to the idea..."do not go gently..."
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f1LaNMQsn5w
Good night to the both of you,
and thank you kindly, my friends.
Rachel