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Wonderland Nightmare

Tweedledee,Tweedledum,

Two Souls trapped in one.

Pretty as Alice, Mad like the Hatter.

Falling down,down,down the rabbit hole,

Slowly surrendering to the fall.

Thoughts growing curioser,ever so curioser,

Faintly the doormouse voice echos,

"Feed your head".

Smoke curls along my lips. With each

cloud exhaled the pain fades.

"Who are you?" asks the Hookah Smoking Catipillar.

The question perks my thoughts in

ways of spoken rhymes.

"Who in the world am I?

Now thats the great puzzle."

Coyly Slinks the cresent moon along the branches.

Feeling the haze of a stale smoke ring I mumble

"Would you tell me please, which way I ought to go from here?"

Stunned into silence when I gained a respones.

"That depends a good deal on where you want to get to."

purred the violet puff of feline. All feeling long past numb,codly retort,

"It doesn't matter to anyone."

The grinning fool shrugged

"Then why does it matter which way to go?"

Once again I'll say,

Pretty as Alice, Mad like the Hatter,

I am completely bonkers,mad,and totally insane...

and not in the best of ways. I'd be aware if I were you,

because I welcome you to my wonderland nightmare.

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Comments

Big Sal

Thu 14th Jun 2018 22:43

Self-contained like an alquitar, but the emotion has no need to be contained since it does indeed shine through.?

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Philip Stevens

Sat 21st Oct 2017 21:37

The grinning fool shrugged "i dont know what it is but i liked it"

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:12

It turns a traditional them on its head and gets its own back on the story and its implications. Puts you in charge within the dream, self induced. A very clever and interesting poem which is like a revisit without the return ticket.

Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:35

A very interesting take on a famous story. Imaginative, with a fine feel for best words to create effective imagery. Well done. 'Coyly slinks the crescent moon along the branches' is just fab! Among many lines.

Since it's page poetry, it's always a good idea to check for spelling. If you're not sure, perhaps someone else might proof it for you? If not, send it along anyway, and your work will still shine with the power of your chosen vocabulary.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Fri 18th Aug 2017 08:06

nice idea for a poem Jacklyn, delightfully unhinged, especially those last three lines. Thanks for posting. Colin.

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