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Monday 26th October 2009 4:37 pm

For sure we are the Master Race
Superiority on our face
We know our background, know our place
Displaying, obviously, our base.

It's merely, clearly, plain to see
What differs betwixt you and me?
None but a fool could disagree
Plain understanding is the key.

Agendas just add to confusion
Dogma creates dark illusion
Circumspect surrounds inclusion
Closed minds now drawing conclusion.

Have you got it, is it clear?
You sure it's how it may appear?
Or are you too within the sphere?
Ignorance creates such fear.

The race to which we are part
Breaths one breath and pumps one heart
Though many things set us a part
Accepting this will be a start.

To generalise kept us from harm
Gave warning, sounded the alarm
So that we didn't chance an arm
A premise most devoid of charm.

An instinct lacking in ideal
To ‘thinkers' it has no appeal
A concept one word will conceal
Cry Racist!, and your fate they seal.

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:50

Wonderfully said Christopher, but ( niggling question ) do you want a small select group of readers, who can extricate the multiple messages, or would you like to appeal to a larger group of readers? Many would feel overwhelmed at having to dissect a poem to find out what it means - a common gripe sometimes on here. I suppose it again boils down to the subjectivity of the reader, and the readership that you want. If it was me ( and you are not me which is part of the beauty of individuality and ability to express, and the sheer diversity of the medium of the poetic form of expression ), I maybe would have developed one message whilst hinting at another, and then develop it into a series of poems.

You can delete this comment by the way if you like - and continue discussion through profile, - again if you like.

None of this is to detract from the fact that I think it's a good poem by the way, and everyone has a certain agenda within their writing that they want to convey at different points in time.

Nicky x

Christopher Dawson

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:28

If I had done that then they would have merely pandered and not provoked, however the essence is in the confliction, the point being the issue is, if you'll forgive me, not as black and white as most would have it be.

Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 14:10

Very difficult Christopher to get multiple messages across in a poem, mainly down to the fact that the reader will probably tune in to the one that they associate with most, or the one that is foremost in their mind at that present time. Which is good in that it may appeal to a wider range of readers. However, if you think logically about it, you could have developed each message into another poem. What do you think? I'm no expert. Just an idea.

Enjoyed it.x

Christopher Dawson

Tue 27th Oct 2009 19:08

Thank you Nicky, though I tried to get other messages over in this too, a mixture, that conflicted but contained validity...just like the subject matter ;)

Nichola Burrows

Tue 27th Oct 2009 08:28

Interesting content here Christopher. One of the biggest flaws of the human race is that we lable everything including the rest of humanity, some of us are labled because of creed, colour, abilities and disabilities, others however may spend a lifetime searching for a lable that suits them and assimilate into a religion or culture or group in order to find an identity and a sense of belonging.

The cause of so much conflict much of it unecessary, we are all made from the same mold but have evolved down a different path.
Good poem, very thoughtproking. Nicky x

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