Hi Nicky, beautifully written, really enjoyed the great descriptive imagery, Jeff X
I liked all of this one Nicky... The amazing first line. Could be one of those famous firstlines of a book. smoothed cheeks was also a favourite. great read. Win
Sorry everyone for the jump, only a little one, but got in trouble off Mr Bradley as you can see for my spelling of Cicadas - habit because I call them chickadees.
They sort of become background music when you practically have them on your doorstep all summer long Dave. Maybe that's why I am slightly mental lol x
Hi Nicky
another good one, dusk beautifully evoked. You do ring the changes in the atmosphere and feel of your poems don't you.
Two problems with cicadas - one is the spelling, the other is that although yes they do sound great for a while, after a bit they can drive you mental
nice stuff - like the end in particular
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Steve Regan
Sat 20th Feb 2010 10:55
A great feeling of fluttering, exotic elegance is evoked by this poem, Nicky.
It's the sort of writing that makes you pause in wonderment at the small things of the Earth.
I hope you don't mind me suggesting one change. I would take out the word 'sweetly' from the 14th line.