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Old Lady

She waits for the access bus outside the door

Of the superstore just down the road;

Her shopping bag placed at her feet on the floor,

Though she doesn’t have much of a load.

 

She goes every day, mostly at the same time,

Just to give herself something to do,

So she doesn’t need much, just parsley and thyme

She will take home to flavour her stew.

 

It lets her escape from within her four walls,

And to meet with her friends on the way,

Because when she’s at home there’s no one that calls,

Though she sits by the window all day.

 

So then at the store well the café is there,

Where they chat with a nice cup of tea,

And maybe on pension day, biscuits to share,

A snack pack to be split between three.

 

Then off round the aisles she knows just where to go,

To look out for the best bargain buys;

For the things that she wants she’ll hunt to and fro

In pursuit of a small portion size.

 

Then when she gets home she will sit once again

And remotely switch on the TV,

While she stares into space to dream about when

She was younger, and wanted, and free.

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Trevor Alexander

Tue 10th Apr 2018 22:42

Thanks Laura.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 10th Apr 2018 13:10

Ohhh, I've only just seen this. Wow. Brilliantly realised, right down to the touches of syntax, and what a killer last line. Nice one Trev.

<Deleted User> (18980)

Mon 9th Apr 2018 13:33

Sorry Trev I misunderstood. I was thinking too much of my mother's situation.

Pat Hughes

Mon 9th Apr 2018 11:24

A fantastic poem,you have taken the ordinary and made it something else.
Reminds me of my mum,dementia has multiplied the loneliness.

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 9th Apr 2018 11:21

Brian: cos they're not very mobile - hence the door-to-door access bus. It'll go to the supermarket, but not to private addresses.
Thanks for reading guys. ?

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 9th Apr 2018 10:13

.....................And maybe on pension day, biscuits to share,

A snack pack to be split between three.............


Bloody Brilliant!

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Martin Elder

Mon 9th Apr 2018 09:22

The last line is perhaps the most telling here.
Nice one

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Hazel ettridge

Mon 9th Apr 2018 09:21

I love your characters,Trev, because we all know them so well (and perhaps wonder whether we will become them one day).

<Deleted User> (18980)

Mon 9th Apr 2018 08:12

Hi Trev - why the hell don't the superstore friends visit each other in their houses? My mother was like this.

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