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Old Man

He sits in the boozer on Saturday nights

On a bar stool that he’s made his own,

And looks a bit care-worn there under the lights,

But he’s been there as long as I’ve known.

 

He wears the same suit every week when he comes,

Though it’s shabby and shiny and worn;

His teeth move around cos they’re loose on his gums,

And his shirt collar’s ragged and torn.

 

He nurses a half as he mumbles away,

Though oft times there’s no one to hear;

We can predict what he’s going to say,

For he’s said it for year upon year.

 

He talks of the old days when he had a life,

And he lived in much happier times,

In years long gone by before he lost his wife,

And when they were both young in their prime.

 

He speaks of his children, now grown and moved on,

With the grandchildren he rarely sees,

And how much he misses them now that they’re gone;

Won’t you look at these photographs please?

 

He sits in the boozer on Saturday nights,

His aroma a hint of stale pee.

With some trepidation, I pale at the sight,

For in time that old man could be me.

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Martin Elder

Wed 11th Apr 2018 09:29

Love this Trev. I sense a theme here. I agree with Ray it has all the makings of a song.
Nice one

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Trevor Alexander

Tue 10th Apr 2018 21:48

No Laura, just playing it by ear. Reckon I've done well to get this far! ?

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Laura Taylor

Tue 10th Apr 2018 13:12

Perfect rhythm, and such a sad poem too.

I didn't realise you were also doing Napo until I looked at the tag for it and saw 17 entries! ? I'll keep a look out for yours now. Are you submitting to the FB official page too?

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 9th Apr 2018 11:23

Thanks for the comments guys.

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raypool

Sun 8th Apr 2018 22:00

This has the rhythmic metre perfect for a song Trevor. A sad one indeed, and nicely described. I can't quite believe its conclusion though - poetry cleanses the soul after all.

Ray

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2018 21:52

Nice work, Trevor.

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Hazel ettridge

Sun 8th Apr 2018 09:12

Tender and gently humorous.

<Deleted User> (18980)

Sun 8th Apr 2018 08:55

Old Tommy from Early Doors!

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