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Paradise Lost

                 Paradise Lost?

Big adjustment.  Nothing like retirement.

One minute, I’m your average day to day man -

up at first light, a couple of grapes, then

on with the day job:  Emu; Elephant;

Duck Billed Platypus; Lesser Spotted Toad

biodiversity makes a demand

on imagination.  But when I tired,

I thought of her under the tree: first bride,

always smiling, beautiful.  Worth a rib;

worth a leg; worth an eye.  Worth Paradise?

Well, debateable; but I’ll tell you this -

I passed it down to all the human tribe -

when the woman you love says sink your teeth

into sweet flesh, what price eternal life?

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jennifer Malden

Fri 21st Jun 2019 17:01

Hi Terry! Had missed this one completely, but think it's fantastic!
Very clever but also moving. Don't see why it got so little attention, deserved a lot more I think. Keep up the good work.

Jennifer

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Sun 22nd Apr 2018 21:46

Brought a lump to my throat (think about it).

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