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CLINGING TO CONVENTION

The woman pushes her babies

five at a time in the well-used buggy,

bag lady to the untrained eye;

but the babies are dolls we see

all cock a hoop jammed in

jostling for air and space. 

 

No one passes the time with her,

and she seems unaware,

too rigidly focussed to notice others'

consternation or disbelief.

Then there is our relief

of walking past, putting distance

 

between her and the challenge

that one might create by saying:

"I love your babies - what are their names?"

to make her feel wanted and important,

knowing somewhere inside that

she might say: "they're only dolls,"

 

and smile ruefully, making us

cling to convention and other

restrictive instincts. 

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raypool

Fri 11th May 2018 22:43

Thanks Hannah. Yes, a sad case in an unfathomable world.
No doubt the psychoanalysts would have an answer.

Ray

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Fri 11th May 2018 22:20

Sadly eccentric. I love the imagery.
I wonder if this is a real person or a creation?
Either way I 'm sure there are people like this and we wouldn't know what to say but somehow I am glad they're there.

Hannah

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raypool

Mon 7th May 2018 15:45

Sorry to drag my heels folks. Col: Great comparison well spotted. He was a guest on the Johnnie Walker show on Radio 2 on Sunday. This is the third attempt at this poem; I thought this was the most direct and pertinent.

Suki, thanks, that's definitely good enough for me, and I did have!

Thank you Anya. We all need that support!

Ray

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suki spangles

Sat 5th May 2018 08:11

Hi Ray,

This is a wonderful composition. Love the reading too.

Have a lovely weekend.

Suki

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Fri 4th May 2018 22:36

so much sadness hidden within these lines - I find it difficult to leave a comment. It made me think of this though so hope you don't mind me sharing the link Ray:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WknaD6HnYHs

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