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Ripped Away

Ripped Away

You came to see me for a day
departing too soon ripped away.
The wall I had built over time tumbled and fell.
I had to stay when you crossed the sea 
you have others.. dad only has me.

Siblings raised along with me,
loved but lost across the sea.

A mother so loved but so far away,
appears now and then just to be ripped away.
An emptiness replaces emotion.
Loneliness replacing your devotion.

Stomach wrenching gut churning tears as I lay,
you are always ripped away.
I want you to give comfort a place to rest,
to soothe this aching in my breast.

I want to beg you to stay,
but I still my voice, my tears, as I smile and wave.
You have taken so much from me.
Every time l want..I need you to stay 
Yet again you're ripped away.

© 2018 Taylor Crowshaw

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Martin Elder

Thu 2nd Aug 2018 22:56

Without doubt there is a good deal of passion written in this piece with well placed repletion of certain lines to place th emphasis on what you want to say.
Nice one

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Thu 2nd Aug 2018 06:35

...without a doubt, this is beautiful! It touched me deeply. Thank you!❤

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 1st Aug 2018 23:42

Thanks for commenting Big Sal love the idea of a song. re book it took me about 6 months to write and another 2 months for me to organise format proof read and get to publication.
Taylor

Big Sal

Wed 1st Aug 2018 23:14

This would make a terrific song Taylor, I can already hear the harpsichord being played to the soft tune of a ballad. ?

I have a question if you don't mind . . .

How long did it take you to write your autobiography/poetry book?

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