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MEMORIES IN THE MIST

"What's that, Daddy?" I had said,

pointing through the window in my memory.

"Railway engines on railway lines," he had said

in the early morning Vauxhall mist.

 

His cigarette smoke blended with

the stuffy morning sun,

another dying day begun;

railway lines,

crossing over an instant distance of time.

 

He read my thoughts,

why wouldn't he? 

 

Today Waterloo was different,

those blank hard business faces

soon to arrive.

 

He had said the mist would clear,

implied my growing up

where all grand dreams are lost

in the shadows of our potential past. 

 

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◄ AT THE END, OR IS IT THE BEGINNING?

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raypool

Tue 28th Aug 2018 23:38

Thanks for liking this Martin. In the fifties we were still recovering from the effects of the war, and in some ways we still lived with remnants of the Victorian period: horses and carts, ancient steam engines and railway infrastructure almost limping on. For kids though it was wonderful as you attest to. We can't go back, but this was a reminder of a sort.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Tue 28th Aug 2018 16:58

Another corker Ray. It certainly brings back memories for me of what seemed to be the black and white world of the fifties and early sixties. I still remember the steam trains in shunting yards and on local lines. Everything was seemingly dirty and grimy then, but we some how accepted as that was the way life was. Thankfully the smoke and mist is not so prevalent now.


Nice one

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raypool

Mon 27th Aug 2018 11:12

Hi folks. This was written after going into London and re-tracing my first time going there in the early fifties. Much more hustle and bustle and a strange industrial environment then, great for kids. As you know everything seems more intense when looking back, so it is a poem about nostalgia and expectations I suppose.


Rachel, anything you contribute is very welcome, I like the idea of freeing the mind from words rather than pinning them down. I think poetry should be a form of dreaming - for me anyway. I never got to see Donnie Darko, but the trailer seems like strong stuff. Thanks a lot.

Thanks Peter, you old romantic, you! Almost a poem in itself.


Taylor, yes exactly right. That medium was all that available in my earliest days.


Cheers David. I popped that line in as an edit; I thought of how our life pans out, and like a seed has to expand into experience, then looked back on. I'll take your observation with a pinch of garlic! The northerly platform at Vauxhall was a milk train storage facility, full of pipework; the milk siphoned off into the arches below - I remember the round milk container trucks.

Shall I get my coat?


Hannah, and Darren, thanks for enjoying the poem, and Des, Jon and Anya for the likes !

Ray

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Mon 27th Aug 2018 06:53

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Sun 26th Aug 2018 19:25

Wistful, beautifully written.

Hannah

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sun 26th Aug 2018 08:02

You painted a wonderful picture with this poem Ray. Reminded me of an old black and white movie. Thank you ?

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Peter Taylor

Sun 26th Aug 2018 06:09

Thanks, Ray.

This went well with the sunrise today: quiet contemplation of things long gone; an understanding forms and perhaps a sadness re-settles, just a little bit changed but the you trucks on, your store of words augmented.

Peter T

elPintor

Sun 26th Aug 2018 01:42

Another great couple of opening lines that led me to think of Donnie Darko and time travel.

Words and implications--maybe it's just the phrasing, but it seems pretty deep, to me.

Rachel

PS
I realize that I have a tendency to leave open-ended comments, but the pleasure of letting the mind wander after reading a piece like this is such that I would rather not interfere by overly expounding...

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=rPeGaos7DB4

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