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Walking home on a summer evening

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The black splat shape of the ragged rook

the egg-smooth hoot of the owl sailing.

The skittering bat goes back and forth

as we walk up the deep dark lane.

 

High hedges make a secret path

cushioning the sides of our home journey.

A confetti of moths scatter in our wake

an escort for our returning.

 

The torch is abandoned,

the night is so pretty

we follow our noses

across the wide fields.

The stiles, we remember,

old friends of great character

they will not trip us,

help us up and over.

 

The footpath gleams softly,

a light that is tracing,

more prominent to us

when our eyes look away.

Don’t worry, don’t concentrate,

let the soft evening guide us.

We hold hands on our doorstep

at the end of the day.

 

for M, two years, still missed  xx

 

 

 

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Dave Bradley

Thu 28th Jan 2010 16:33

How could I miss this? Lovely. The understatement of emotion somehow heightens it and makes it more poignant

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Fri 8th Jan 2010 13:04

Some great lines in this Ann.
Loved the confetti of moths line and image.
Nice poem and a lovely stroll.

Thanks for sharing,
Janet.x

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Noetic-fret!

Thu 7th Jan 2010 18:28

Yep, a nice descriptive poem that makes you feel as if you are taking the walk by your side. It also makes you feel good too, about the summer because we are in the grips of a frost. its been time since i took a walk like this. Nice poem

Mike

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kealan coady

Thu 7th Jan 2010 12:19

Nice piece and the setting is clear and very observational.

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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 7th Jan 2010 12:09

Ohh, this is absolutely beautiful. I already was sighing when I read the beautiful imagery 'the egg smooth hoot' and 'confetti of moths', then the last stanza just nearly had me in tears. Such a warm, honeyed poem, full of love.
Rachel
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