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PLAYING THE SAXOPHONE

The saxophone is only as good as you feel,

a masterpiece of confusion brought to heel,

constantly seeking company.

"Speak with me

speak with me it says,

I have so much to tell."

 

With plaintive insistence it reaches out,

then, tired from sound

lays down in velvet ruffs.

 

Enough is enough the ventriloquist says,

then the dummy cries itself to sleep,

in a dream seeks lonely streets

where life goes on,

 

when maidens awaken to its seductive sound. 

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raypool

Fri 7th Sep 2018 17:59

HI Don. Object achieved, a bit of musical description goes a long way (like Australia). Thanks a lot.


Hi David, that's an astute point - some achieve variety with mouthpiece choice on a sax, but a trumpet has an advantage of mutes for mood. In one band I was in, the saxes were referred to as novelties. Some interesting points of analysis you make for comparisons, maybe to be discussed over a pint.


Hi Taylor, did I stumble on a truism ? If you think so I am doubly pleased. Cheers !


220 August, funny how a line sort of seems better when it's quoted in a comment. How does that work? So thanks for pointing it out, glad you liked it.

Special thanks to Peter Kevin Jennifer and Anya.

Ray

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220August

Thu 6th Sep 2018 14:46

"Enough is enough the ventriloquist says,

then the dummy cries itself to sleep,

in a dream seeks lonely streets

where life goes on,"....Quite interestingly good!

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 5th Sep 2018 09:49

I think the first line is a truth to any endeavor we undertake.. It is only ever as good as we feel. Thanks Ray enjoyed this poem..

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Don Matthews

Wed 5th Sep 2018 00:25

I like this Ray ?

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