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My woe is begotten
My memories are forgotten
My music is catholic
My holidays are not
My suit is cheap because the tailors working in sweatshops in the far-east get a pittance
My pizza l do not eat pizza
My asthma is genetic
My brilliance is wasted
My time is also wasted
My sexual preferences are not your concern
My religion is banished
My criminal record is the stuff of legend
My tendency to exaggerate is problematic
My patience is wearing
My future is behind a locked door
My locked door has a key
My keyring is in my closed fist
My memory is ...

Words and images by Tommy Carroll

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 26th Sep 2018 17:38

Cheers Darren, know what I mean?

<Deleted User> (19421)

Wed 19th Sep 2018 05:38

Class!
Class!
Class!
....

Cheers

DJB

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 18th Sep 2018 23:31

Stu I think repetition
is a literal thrill.
I was at school
and Mr Monaghan
"tut tutted' my
use of it.

Thank you Stu for
your pointed lean against a shoulder
Ta La

Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 18th Sep 2018 23:25

Martin you please me
with your generous
comments of the verse.
But your choice
of particular lines
makes me warm in
its recognition.
Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 18th Sep 2018 23:17

But Brian that is its 'its'.
And I know that you will
shiver with recognition
because of your poignant
humour.

Tommy

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Stu Buck

Mon 17th Sep 2018 11:01

great stuff tommy. repetition is hard to get right i think and you have done it justice here.

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Martin Elder

Sun 16th Sep 2018 21:53

Absolutely brilliant Tommy. I love the repetitive use of my to start each line.
I particularly love the lines around criminal record and exaggeration
Nice one mate

<Deleted User> (18980)

Sun 16th Sep 2018 19:10

It's all me, me, me Tommy!

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