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I WASN'T UPSET

I wasn't upset at the funeral today,

my cup already full of misery.

Death shouldn't be a matter of numbers,

but they were clocking up

in familiar places,

with unspoken duties of sadness.

 

The last one was different

which I couldn't attend

nursing my shocked and tender heart,

but families are full of expectation

and familiar strangers,

so this time it didn't count quite the same

 

as that man who had no reason

nor right to die the way he did,

who respected me for no reason at all,

and with so much love as yet untapped,

but sometimes a stranger affects us more

as death awaits behind the door. 

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 17:12

Thanks Big Sal for stepping in. This was a hard one to write, and i'm glad it made some sense.

Ray

Big Sal

Mon 1st Oct 2018 18:25

The last stanza is humility incarnate. Very well done piece Ray, enjoyed reading it twice.

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raypool

Sat 29th Sep 2018 23:16

Thanks for the comment Brian. The older we get....

Thoughtful and much to consider thanks David. I agree about having time to adjust in advance, giving some measure of solace. I think a bit of us goes with them if there's a real closeness. I don't think we should be hypocritical and pretend adulation if we are under impressed with the dead person. When I've read my poems for a funeral I like to try to capture some of their true character, and chance alienating a few. Usually they appreciate it. To be honest, it's often the emotions of others that crack me up rather than my own. Empathy?


Thank you Hannah. Glad you thought that about it.


Thanks for the likes, Des, Anya and Jane.

Ray

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Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:02

A different view of grief.
Very moving.

Hannah

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Thu 27th Sep 2018 23:43

My funeral attendances are rising exponentially Ray. I'm at one tomorrow, and only avoided one last week by virtue of the fact that I was abroad.

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