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Early January Snow Blues

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There is calmness

Like a Buddhist prayer

On the road

When it snows

And cars are afraid

To come down it.

 

There is softness

In the trees rustling

When the wind

Shakes it off

Which reminded me

Of my father

When he used

To shake off his boots

Before he stepped back inside

After gritting

The front path.

 

And as it gets softer

Like Andrex paper

Before getting crushed

Into ice

Leaving a hush in the sky

Of slight fog

The moment is mesmerising.

 

But I am still glad

When it is all gone.

 

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Beulah

Mon 18th Jan 2010 09:00

hi, thanks for the comments. Will pop another look aother time.

Beulah Ben'Adam

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Sun 17th Jan 2010 08:56

I missed this one as it passed through Andy, Watching snow fall evokes these feeling in me too, I always thought it was the excitment of the ever present child within, but as the years advance I realise it is more than that, it is the peace which falling snow brings with it that is also to be cherished. Great poem.TC

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Steve Regan

Wed 13th Jan 2010 12:35

Andy, I love the ending of this and the warm, slightly regretful tone.

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Isobel

Mon 11th Jan 2010 19:03

Well, I think we are all agreed that we would like to see the back of the snow!I liked the way you set the scene in this poem. There can surely be nothing more tranquil and unhurried than a buddhist prayer...I also liked the comparison of the wind brushing snow to the action of your father cleaning his boots.Not at all sure about the Andrex toilet paper. Maybe it is my schoolgirl sense of humour, but you can't mention toilet paper without me wanting to giggle. Unless I am alone in that or unless that is the effect you are wanting, I would consider changing the image. I liked the simple, matter of fact ending though - great contrast to the rest of the poem. x

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Mon 11th Jan 2010 15:12

Glad you changed the title.

Love the first stanza because it reminds me of that uncertain moment of travelling down-hill on a wing and a prayer.
Also not wanting to spoil the beauty of the first snows by adding tyre tracks etc..

I love the silence as the snow falls, it's as if the world has stopped revolving for those few precious moments in time and allows us to reflect on memories. Like yours about your Father's boot shaking off snow.

I'll be glad to see the back of it too now though. :-)
Janet.x

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 11th Jan 2010 14:04

This has a prayer-like quality about it that I like. (But I wish it would go too!)

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