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My mind is my prison, but I hold the key

My mind is my prison

when it should be my home

where I sit in front

of an open fire and

keep myself snug and warm.

 

Instead my prison guards

are my thoughts and

situations my bars,

together they keep me

in solitary confinement,

but I am always keeping

a close watch on my sentries

as they make their regular patrol

and I begin to see a pattern

to their sly movements.

My bars are not quite

as strong as they appear

 

so, I begin to retake

control and hold them fast

until the moment arrives

when I can break them down

and let them loose

to continue on their journey,

allowing me to unlock the door

to escape the cell and

to rejoin the world again.

 

Home.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Fri 12th Oct 2018 15:59

Wonderful thought provoking poem thank you Jon ?

Big Sal

Thu 11th Oct 2018 19:31

Great analogy.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 11th Oct 2018 14:50

The strength of these lines is the way they can be interpreted across the spectrum of responses. Well
thought out in theme and construction.

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Jon Stainsby

Thu 11th Oct 2018 12:57

Hi Becky,

If it can be of help to you, and your students of course you can use it.

Jon

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Becky Who

Thu 11th Oct 2018 11:51

Jon, I think your title would make an amazing writing prompt for a student poetry workshop I'm trying to set up. Would you mind if I used it then showed them your poem? Fully acknowledged of course.

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Thu 11th Oct 2018 10:30

A fantastic poem Jon!

The power of the mind is amazing and learning to control it is the key to freedom and self healing! Freedom from the chains of society and healing one's pains without drugs.
You've written a great poem on an issue which nearly all people experience at some point in their lives. May we all find the power to free ourselves and live in peace! Personally, I am an advocate of meditation as it has helped me to change my life! Thank you for this poem!!!

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keith jeffries

Thu 11th Oct 2018 09:32

Jon,

This poem gives us a lot to think about and probably means different things to different people as it is open to interpretation. The final stanza is one of hope; release from conformity of thought and action whereby the reader realises his own poetential and takes control of his own destiny. Very thought provoking.

Thank you for this,

Keith

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Jon Stainsby

Thu 11th Oct 2018 08:30

Hi David,

Thank you for your comments.

I didn't do it on purpose, but yes a good day to post this. I wrote it a while ago, but finished it yesterday.

Yes, I understand, or try to understand the many, many obstacles people have to good state of mental health.

Humankind as a whole needs to be more aware and more understanding of the complexities surrounding this area.

Jon







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