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WALKING AT SUNRISE

WALKING AT SUNRISE

I walked at sunrise yesterday, pink-orange paintwork

spreading wide in the East and coating vapour trails,

each dipped – no drips – for just a moment, in a tin,

hidden from human eyes, like (I surmise) the smocks and brushes.

Once coloured, they striped the sky at random angles,

criss-crossing, and I thought of tangled oriental characters

twisted and bent into a riddle.

 

Two thoughts took shape: was I right to blurt surprise

that this work, so simple, so beautiful, had never before

arrested my gaze; and second, a childish wish, a fleeting naïve notion,

that I might make something of this discovery, make something of me,

might sit at some Master’s knee and trade nature’s nuances.

How marvellous to catch and pocket these orangey spears,

with pinking shears the world’s least urgent inventions.

 

But as I rushed to steal away, with every step

the colour scheme and shapes dissipated, faded away –

as I should have expected at least a dozen dawn morning moments back,

way back when the colour first flooded and hurried round

the gaps between the lumpy, stubborn winter clouds; and made it

clear that there was no scope for piggy-back on any part at all

of this dazzling, dreamy paint display.

 

And I should have expected that the sky would shun

any ingenuous, amateur assertion of rights in respect of

the sun, its place and the use, however derivative, of any

feature, fold or story told from representations of its ancient face.

For few of us can fully embrace the scale of the task, each day to

orchestrate the antics of the winds and their weathers, then

lock them loosely but firmly together and

 

daub them in pastels with feather-filled pillows,

making light work of responding to each and every call –

and a call must include not only that of simple minds

which assume inheritance for so long as permitted to remain;

but also of people and things who dare broach the sun

and whose domains may extend to the fires and furnaces

that would roast me in a moment, no carbon footprint.

 

Speaking of which...my eyes open and I see my feet, unscathed,

warm but not dangerously so. The orange-pink darts, having played

their parts in syllables splashed nearly coherently, are packed away

in a quiver, slung over a shoulder, where they must be content to shiver,

the while uncovering more meaning in phenomena in a cynical age.

I have a fondness for them and they know I Iike to slow and

close my eyes and make the most of what surrounds me.

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◄ AFTERWARDS

AN ACTOR'S LAMENT ►

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Peter Taylor

Wed 13th Mar 2019 21:28

David, Jennifer, Alan, Martin, Jon and Ray, I am humbled by your wonderful support for and attention to this poem, which seems to resonate in many readers. I guess the sun is just about the most important part of our lives. It is at the same time incredibly functional, frightening and beautiful.
Peter

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raypool

Mon 14th Jan 2019 17:08

Your method is always to expound and expand until every possible connotation is complete Peter, and in doing so we are entranced by the poetic mind you have. You seem to have infinite patience with material, and I am at the opposite end of that, with just flourishes to make suggestions. It is so intriguing to see other like minds with different techniques.

The magic of dawns and sunsets aah!

Ray.

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 14th Jan 2019 06:47

Magical, Peter. The wonders that surround us when we are mindful to them.

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Peter Taylor

Mon 14th Jan 2019 04:17

David, many thanks indeed for your thoughts on fleshing out and defining in mere words the essence of a beautiful thing. The right words are always at the horizon – and always for a limited period of time. We must always be ready to concede no permanence but fight to find beauty in ordinary lives and celebrate it. It is all around.

Jennifer, I think we are exactly on the same page on this one, it's good to share a language, thank you.

Alan, yes, hands up when it comes to drawing on past events/eras without a scrap of experience as regards what many will be revisiting as bad situations – not my intention at all. With WW2, I hope that the people who find themselves immediately face-to-face with a painful piece of their past are relatively few in number but it's a good point.

Martin, thank you for your generosity – your endorsement is most welcome.

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Martin Elder

Sun 13th Jan 2019 23:26

There are some beautiful sunsets and therefore gorgeous sunsets at this time of year in particular which are set off nicely by the starkness of winter. Wonderfully captured here Peter
Nice one

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Alan Travis Braddock

Sun 13th Jan 2019 21:06

Lovely word pictures Peter. Sadly I can't help but look at trails in the sky as reminders of the fighter planes during WW2 and the deaths of so many young men - or was that not what you saw?

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jennifer Malden

Sun 13th Jan 2019 17:19

Beautiful poem, natural things can be so incredibly beautiful, all the more so because often they don't last for very long.

Jennifer

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