Hold me while I fall apart
the little things I say as we sit by the waterside
my memories start to slip away like the waves up on the bay
what is he who comes to my side?
all the bad things start to fade away
take it away I say as he holds my hands
broken dreams, making plans
hold me I’m falling apart
this feeling surely cannot last by the waterside
JC
I agree with Katie the opening line is powerful and begs you to keep reading!
<Deleted User> (19913)
Sat 9th Mar 2019 05:55
Hold me while I fall apart... Such a powerful beginning. Alive with vulnerability and the trust it takes to allow someone near while it happens.
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Jason Bayliss
Sat 9th Mar 2019 09:00
It makes me think of letting go of things that you don't want to lose, but can't possibly hope to keep, in the comforting arms of someone you truly trust. Really thought provoking.
J. x