tanka for the nemophilia
spring defies winter
ibaraki's acid bruise
piercing litmus noise
detune freezing radio
submission to fleeting hope
Comments
Frances Macaulay Forde
Tue 19th Mar 2019 14:35
So do I Stu. An excellent effort.
For those who don't know, this form is 5 -7 -5- 7- 7- with reference to nature, feelings and with a twist or a question in the last line.
i'm nothing if not a rule breaker graham!
Stu you've got me going now (work in progress) but shouldn't Tanka be in the first person?
thanks both. i love the japanese short forms rachel, they impress a real boundary on the words you use but don't limit the imagination.
elPintor
Tue 19th Mar 2019 06:00
I'm quite fond of these brief forms that embody such vastness--I must study more.
Rachel
A Christ
Mon 18th Mar 2019 17:32
I am a moth to flames.
March comes in like a tiger and leaves like a lamb.
To measure the impact of pressure and the radius of the bruise.
I submit my hopelessness to the gallow's of verdict.
Baby's got blue eyes when the morning comes...
https://youtu.be/4CiyKeSnSxk
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raypool
Tue 19th Mar 2019 19:28
I envy your dictionary mind Stu. A vast palette to draw from, and the result is a fascination that gives us hope for creativity.
Ray