i am idiot young and
in the back of the car
i close my eyes just so
the light of the sun
between the trees beats a tattoo
behind my lids and lenses
and that is all I want to be
just then - isolation
pink black pink black pink black
a heartbeat from 8 minutes before
Only just seen this. Idiot young is a great expression. And I've done this kind of thing so many times. Closing each eye in turn to flip-flop perspective was a favourite of mine.
cheers ray! hope you are well mate
wonderful concise writing the sense of movement of being in your head is exquisite Stu. A design classic of a poem.
Ray
thanks trevor thats lovely of you to say!
The economy of words is impressive. The impact exceptional.
Yep I am planning to be there in June. see you soon
thanks martin. will i see you at Sale in June (might be there next month as well as i know the people guesting)
such fond memories so well summed up here Stu. I can remember doing such a thing myself at a certain idiot young age.
Nice one
thanks for all your kind words
i'm glad this resonated with you
its all i could ever ask!
(thats what i drink brian and i assumed i was the only one!)
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 22nd Apr 2019 17:02
Just had this experience... though mine involved three pints of Bathams on an empty stomach. Enjoyed your piece Stu.
Stu,
This captures an inconsequential moment of time with the precision of a surgeon with a scalpel. I am entranced by its brevity and intensity.
Thank you
Keith
Hi Stu, it captures a moment intensely we're right there experiencing the moment but then there is the enigma of what's coming next.
John S
Once in a while someone defines a perfect moment with clinical brevity and the outcome should be framed and hung on a wall. Brilliant Stu.
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Stu Buck
Tue 30th Apr 2019 12:52
i did that too! glad you liked the poem mate been reading your daily contributions with great gusto.