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Rite of Passage

Half-dead, wrapped and sealed in a dusty cocoon 

Half-alive, I can feel my senses slowly awakening 

And I hearken the wide world outside beckoning 

It looks as if I am to hatch and break out soon

I will squint a bit in shock to the incandescent sun,

stretch my sore muscles and my brand new wings,

then I'll come find you my doted love, my only one!

Coyly I'll whisper to you all kinds of tender things, 

I'll recount my baffling visions and bizarre dreams.

From my days back in the thrall of my spun womb

tell you what the world from inside a prison seems

I'll even accept I'm on a journey towards my tomb!

I'll listen closely all about your exploits whilst alive

of the places and names and that one crucial song

Of your feud with the spineless insiders of the hive.

And if you're summoned away urgently I'll be along

 

If you'll only have my heart 

If you'll promise that we'll never part.

 

I'll make this precarious rite of passage for you

And I will gladly live to die, ever yours, ever true.

 

Or else why ever be born?

only to exist

doomed, alone and forlorn?

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◄ To Forgive Oneself

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Mae Foreman

Wed 1st May 2019 19:53

Thanks Jennifer! It's an overused metaphor but it's beautiful and I couldn't help it sο I indulged! Thank you ?
Mae

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jennifer Malden

Wed 1st May 2019 19:34

Loved this one! Liked the butterfly metaphor.

Jennifer

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Mae Foreman

Wed 1st May 2019 09:22

Thank you Jason!

"You'd think that people would have had enough of silly love songs!
I look around me and I see it isn't so!"

Who was it that said that the people who write about love are the ones who don't know anything about it?

It's true though, I rarely like a love poem or a love story but very often feel the need to write one myself...

I'm secretly a romantic soul! But shhh!
Thanks Jason?

Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 30th Apr 2019 22:50

Why else were we born indeed Mae?

Never doomed nor forlorn, just as long as you spread your wings. x

Beautiful poem. I thought you said you didn't like love poems?
And yet you seem to be very good at writing them.

J. x

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Mae Foreman

Tue 30th Apr 2019 12:46

Thank you so much Mona!
I'm glad you like it ?
Mae

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mona s

Tue 30th Apr 2019 12:38

Mae
Tenderly written and captivating images. Beautiful poem.. ?

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