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Uncle Fred, recently dead

came back suddenly to life

at number 32 Tavistock Crescent

and made a mockery of the present

while trams went by with a metal sigh,

 

and our hands were joined as we held our breath.

The tiny voice began to issue

from somewhere near the aspidistra

while Mrs Mulvaney in a velvet dress

appeared to be in some distress,

and the trams went by with a metal sigh

full of workers to the terminus.

 

The drapes were tight across the divide

a suffocating silence inside

apart from the voice of Uncle Fred

who died in somebody else's bed.

A double life he may have led

 his secret remaining  beyond the grave

with his wife in limbo equally lost

and the trams went by with a metal sigh

quite serenely in the pattering rain

with a yellow light in Mitcham Lane

making contact against the sky

the overhead wires thrilling with power

the transiting clouds hurrying by.

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raypool

Sun 9th Jun 2019 21:17

Hi Jennifer and thanks! Some runs were quite scary, I just about remember the London trams. I believe the Edinburgh ones were royal blue and cream. Great memories. Funny that many cities have now re introduced them - albeit single deckers articulated like the European ones. Two poems in one really. Glad this appealed to you!

Ray





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jennifer Malden

Sun 9th Jun 2019 16:10

Fantastic Ray. Like Dorothy, loved the idea of Uncle Fred................... ...........Have to confess I remember Edinburgh trams as a child, but they made sparks and terrifying metallic noises, and always seemed to me to be quite out of control! The names are also great it is like a film scene.
Jennifer

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raypool

Mon 3rd Jun 2019 13:02

Thanks Dorothy. I just use juxtaposition of different ideas sometimes and if it works as you suggest that's great for me! Flowers accepted .

Hi David. I get you ! "In Ireland nothing happened." was one of Milligan's running lines, I recall it well. A sort of nihilistic shrug off!
There is a sort of self indulgent glow that comes with making up names and places, all of which can have that imagery that we might respond to. I know you are sensitive to atmosphere - where does that come from? Answers on a postcard please.

Martin, nice comment and I feel delighted you have found pleasure in the poem. Yes, I go back to travelling on the last trams in London -quite rocky on the tracks and the lights would flicker. Bit like the underground rides. Why didn't Boris bring'em back? I love the Blockheads songs so original. Thanks.

Do you refer to the after eight Minx Brian? ha ha . I'm pleased you liked my little tale. I remember the trolleybuses and had the Ian Allan books. Only once went on one, to Hampton Court. A fast run with no stops. Where we did we go wrong? I've also got a Blackpool tramways ticket machine. Now you know. I'll get my uniform.

Kevin, thanks for looking in and liking the tale. I know you have a unique monologue ability, so it's a pleasure .

Ray

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kJ Walker

Sat 1st Jun 2019 07:32

Ditto what everyone else has said. Loved the names, and the line about trams .

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Fri 31st May 2019 23:28

I like the tram lines (see what I did there?).

I'm too young to remember British trams apart from those on Blackpool promenade...my era is trolley buses in West London. But in recent years I have visited Amsterdam a lot and love the sound of trams on the tracks and the warning bells.

Anyway, I really like the piece Ray and will definitely read it again in the morning whilst not under the influence of drink and my wife not hovering nearby with her rolling pin. She wouldn't dare challenge me when sober! Anyway, got to go now as she is pestering me for sex, the minx!

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Martin Elder

Fri 31st May 2019 23:01

Fabulous Ray. The trams you talk about a great deal different to the trams of today. The trams from that period had what you describe as a ' metal sigh' There is something totally unique about that sound which sticks in the memory.
It also smacks of a time when almost every other house might have had that prized aspidistra .
The line about Uncle Fred found dead in somebody else's bed puts me in mind of a line in an Ian Dury song
'coming home and finding somebody else's kippers in the grill'
sorry I am rambling now. I will stop
suffice to say, brilliant poem mate
nice one

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Fri 31st May 2019 20:40

Ray

i like this so much you deserve a large bunch of flowers -

I love the thought of 'Uncle Fred' - 'dying in someone else's bed' - 'while the trams went by with a metal sigh' -

Dorothy

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