Clickity clack, clicking teeth with the downstairs lips
Blood drawn straight to paint the smile red
Insatiable hunger and her belly a fanged eclipse
Clickity clack, a guillotine for another head
You mistook appearance for open invitation
Woe to the conqueror, now demon’s prey
Unholier than thou, man of desecration
Weapon of choice snatched gleefully away.
Thank you all so much! I wasn't sure about this one and it sat in a computer document for a long time while I debated changing or adding to it. It's certainly a fun one and that was the intention to have the light cheerful sounding poem filled with a dark idea.
Jason
'The thing about a skillful rhyme and a skillful delivery is that it adds to the overall meaning and resonates deep within us'
This is why I use rhyme. It is not easy to write a good one. Prose is much easier. I admire any poet who rises to the challenge
Dark and yes definitely macabre, but oh so beautifully put together. The thing about a skillful rhyme and a skillful delivery is that it adds to the overall meaning and resonates deep within us, I think this has a lot to do with the nursery rhymes that we all learn when we're young. Something about that rhythm and style reaches our inner child, which is why it hits so hard. This one left me wanting to find that inner child and give it a hug. Really, really well written Heart.
J. x
There is a strange kind of innocence in these opening lines that draws the reader in to something a little more macabre.
Nice one
I like the way the words roll around the tongue and your rhyming here HOL........
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Becky Who
Sat 21st Sep 2019 14:27
Amazing imagery and word play, AND it rhymes. Great stuff.