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If Pessimistically Hopeful

If lights should smile from shadowed face 

whose eyes were darker still 

Would all not called to hallowed place 

watch with breath and thrill

 

If from within an armament

A flower petals drawn

would that not be a silent hint

of sun before the dawn

 

if silence were the loudest cry

we ever wished to hear

would all the tears that never dry

lend to us all some cheer

 

 if all treasures we ever lost

 were gifts that no one gave

 would we as pirates on ocean's tossed

 sail on with hearts so brave

 

If all the heat from icy wind

were flames in glaciers blue

would smiles from faces gaunt and thinned

still sing our hearts as true

 

Even if endless front were back

and clouds were underground

would all that we have lost and lack

ever be truly found.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Tue 27th Aug 2019 21:58

Thank you all for reading and commenting. I originally titled it "If... not that poem" similar to my "Goodnight Moon...not that book" of a couple days back but thought better of continuing in that vein...so will retitle it with your input.

Adam

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 27th Aug 2019 21:46

Actually, yeah, "If," is a great title, I know that it's the title of one of my favourite all time poems by Rudyard Kipling, but I would have to agree with Lisa on this one, If is a great title.

J. x

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Lisa C Bassignani

Tue 27th Aug 2019 21:00

'If' is a good title...I wrote one years ago along this line that I called 'If' Yours is much better Adam.
My 4th grade teacher would always question us with ' what if...'
Wonder...be curious...dream

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 27th Aug 2019 17:45

Beautiful poem Adam. You could title it “If” which is a pessimistically hopeful word!

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Adam Rabinowitz

Tue 27th Aug 2019 08:00

Please please someone come up with a better title.

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