It's Easy to Believe

Sunday 21st March 2010 5:44 pm (first posted Saturday 20th March 2010 9:18 pm)

Music and witchery
weave their thick spell
whilst we move to the rhythm
of a more primative beat.

So play me well.

Merge gradually

smoothly,
legato.

Compelling

yet, so simple.

That moment when
senses are heightened
to the scent of spiced poppies
and the heart is pierced
by desire.

When flesh wants
to savour and enjoy
another such as you,
we shall dance,
in a pleasure of anticipation.

But only, if you play me well.

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<Deleted User> (6315)

Sun 21st Mar 2010 17:48

Thankyou for all those great comments and advice..I have edited to 'a pleasure of anticipation' and yes it does roll off the tongue smoothly! The inspiration for this is the relationship between myself and my violin.

<Deleted User> (7164)

Sun 21st Mar 2010 12:30

I enjoyed this too. I heard the music and the drum beat and happily danced in the dream.

I learn a lot from Darrens comments though i don't always understand the technical terms he uses such as 'velar consonant' etc..
'pleasurable anticipation' seems to roll from the tongue when emphasis is on the 'an' as i read it aloud (AN- tici-PA-tion but i would probably have written is as pleasure of anticipation too.
How about an audio?

ps this for me is a great example of how the comments section in blogs should really be like. A good mix of thoughts, feelings, observations and helpful knowledgeable know how.
:-)

Dave Bradley

Sun 21st Mar 2010 10:37

I liked this a lot too Stella. It went down very well when performed.

darren thomas

Sun 21st Mar 2010 09:22

Purely from your seemingly deliberate choice of words and their phonaesthetic quality, you have highlighted how an awareness of the difference between a voiceless velar consonant <music> <thick> is contrasive with the sounds of <smoothly> <compelling> etc.

This is great.

The phrase 'pleasureable anticipation' however, is then made to 'sound' like it's riding over cobbles in a wonky wheeled shopping trolly.

'in the (a) pleasure of anticipation' (?) has more in common with the smoothness of the other words in use toward the end of the piece.

I enjoyed it - it stopped me watching Match of the Day.

Isobel

Sun 21st Mar 2010 08:55

I like this one Stella - it is so very sensual and you performed it beautifully at the Bards.

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